Internal Monologue Workshop—3rd
Read the following internal monologues one at a time.
Judge each by the following:
Is the piece mostly an internal monologue?
Does the internal monologue make sense/read clearly?
Is the internal monologue realistic?
Does the internal monologue convey the decisions the student
made about the woman?
Does the internal monologue TELL you explicitly about the
character, or does the monologue SHOW you (through description and/or
character’s voice) who the character is and what’s going on?
Point of view? 1st person
Who is she? A company owner
Portrayal? Scared, confused
I was running to a business
meeting that day in downtown. I was late and was in a hurry. It seemed if
I was being watched or followed. A bunch of men kept staring at me as if
they were gonna grab me and take me with them somewhere by force. I think I
was paranoid though. No one else seemed to notice what I was seeing in the
same manner. That was the most awkward that last year.
Point of view? 3rd person
Who is she? ??????????
As the men turned their
heads, whispers going about, there was not another woman in sight. What do
they want? Have they ever seen a woman before? This young single woman
walking down the man filled street was getting a lot of attention. She was
always a nice young woman, didn’t think anything would happen to her. Her
name was Mary, and has dealed with a lot of men before, so she decided just
to walk by them.
Point of view? 3rd person
Who is she? one of the first business lady
Portrayal? not intimidated, strong
Where? downtown business area
Situation? walking down the street from work
A lady walks down the street
in the downtown are while guys shout out coments like What do you know about
bussines and stick with baking pies. Why are people like this she wonders
while ignoring the coments shes receiving. Just wait untill I become the
richest bussiness woman and then lets see what the have to say. One day
women and men will have equal rights.
Point of view? 1st
Who is she? The woman’s name is Nancy. She is
Portrayal? She is mad and lost.
Where? coming from a boyfriend’s
Situation? She and her boyfriend got into an
I can’t believe he had the
nerve to tell me that. We’ll see if I call him again. She continued to
walk. Was I suppose to turn there. Oh well. He’s so wrong and he knows he
is. Like I didn’t see him with Penelope. Where am I? Anyway, she told me
she was with him. Where did all these guys come from? Where am I? Should
I ask one of them? She looks around. These men are acting as if though
they’ve never seen a woman. They want me. Why doesn’t he? Why do I
continually take him back? Oh man I’m really lost. I’ll show him. I’ll
show him that I don’t need him. Oh there’s the bus.