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9th Period--Moving from Outline to Paragraphs, 5/22

The good part about spending so much time on your outline is that if you have done it well, then writing the paragraphs for your argument will be a snap!  Look below at how I wrote my body paragraph from the outline we did together.  Each section of the outline is colored to match what I wrote in the paragraph.  See the similarities??

II.  Reason One: Illegal immigrants cost too much

A. Transition and topic sentence:  First of all, I think Prop. 187 is a good law because illegal immigration is costing Californians too much money.

B.  Evidence:  For example, Gov. Pete Wilson “discovered that the cost of illegals to California, in unemployment, medical, educational and other services, was more than $4 billion annually” (p. 6).

C.  Explain evidence: What this means is that because illegals don’t pay as many taxes as citizens, citizens have to pay more money to cover services like education that illegals use.  That’s not fair to citizens.

D.  Tie-back to thesis:  Prop. 187 tries to stop this unfair situation, therefore, I think it’s a good law.

 

        First of all, I think Prop. 187 is a good law because illegal immigration is costing Californians too much money.  For example, Gov. Pete Wilson "discovered that the cost of illegals to California, in unemployment, medical, educational and other services, was more than $4 billion annually."  What this means is that because illegals don't pay as many taxes as citizens, citizens have to pay more money to cover services like education that illegals use.  That's not fair to citizens.  Prop. 187 tries to stop this unfair situation, therefore, I think it's a good law.